 squiggle-line 2006-01-28 . chapter 1!
"so many words have been spoken/outlined in gold..." That's gorgeous imagery. And I like how you destroy it immediately afterwards with "holding no meaning because you have yet to decipher my code"
"blurring into the limelight" !
absentmindedly as one word, instead of two?
"in an absence of thought" is a nice line too...but you already used absentmindedly earlier so it sounds kinda redundant? Maybe use anothe word?
Nice. =D |
 just a teardrop 2005-12-27 . chapter 1gorgeous work! il add you to my faves i think! |
 a lonely september 2005-12-27 . chapter 1'in an absense of thought' really suits the whole limelight theme. nice job. |
 Ellin Louise 2005-12-27 . chapter 1Well written, i love the second line. |
 Infection 2005-12-27 . chapter 1this was good, liked it a lot. |