 Nemonus 2007-11-05 . chapter 1"“I think my friend wants to join you. You’ll be safer in a group.”
“Party.” Agreed his friend, who obviously didn’t speak English." lol!
I'm beginning to understand your symbolism. There's some very clever dialogue in this one.
Nice. I like the creative, consistent world and the narrator. However, exactly what happened in the fourth-to-last paragraph is a bit unclear; it deals with the Universe, not the computers, so I couldn't attach meaning to it without a bit more info. I hope you don't mind my relatively foolish reviews on your clever works. They're entertaining. |