The rhyme makes this poem flow well. And the purpose and point is pretty gangster, too.
You could just about quote any part of this poem, it's really that cool but uh I like "This year in the sky" that made me smile. Good job you.
~Sara.

Powerful piece. Like the way you've added the sadness to what is normal seen as a joyous occasion. Really drives the message home. Well done.

if I say, 'I Love You & Want Your Babies?!' would it rub the wrong way?

(GAH!, you inspired me. thank you! :))

~* noelle

i like this, i can actually picture how it was on Independence Day. Nice job