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| Give me Malice 2006-06-28 ch 1,  | abuseOh, I just love it so far. Please continue! |
| Lady Psychic 2006-04-22 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like this story. I think you should leave the end as it is. A kiss would have been too much (not to mention cliche). The embace at the end was appropriate enough. |
| Limited Edition 2006-01-30 ch 1, | abuseAwesome beginning, and your flow with words is very good, because you've managed to put in much action without it being "he did this, he did that"; you've varied the sentences. In some parts you've used the word "he" too much, even though you could've just skipped the words, because it's unnecessary.I've got a weakness for angels and anything gothic...Most people smutt it out too much...like smudged and poorly done make up with too much red lipstick and too bold eye make up that just doesn't go with the hair and the cheap white foundation, but hey, you made it ^_~Raphael is such an uke XD SO UKE!I like how it's easy to follow the conversation without getting confused over who said what.I want a massage to *cries*LOL "I'm the ** angel of life!" WAHAHAHAHAI liked the embrace. Kiss would be too much actually...it wouldn't fit. If you don't make it seem non-sexual that is.Good work ^^*does the advertisement dance* Review my stuff too pweese *chu* *dances out* |
| Amarant Rose Coral 2006-01-23 ch 1, | abuseI did enjoy it! Hey it was a great story... But... sorry to say it... but man it's a LONG chap to read... I really liked it! Wonderful written by the way... A great story please continue |