Oh...it's good. I like your story. It has the cultural touch to it.

This is a very interesting and original concept, weaving two tales of the underworld together.

Please update soon!

The first paragraph gave a lot of information. Ianthe's reasoning was interesting. I'd think the same thing, too. The way her father doesn't want to "spare a bull or even a kid" tells the reader he's not the kindest soul. All around, great use of language in this chapter. Your diction is always perfect, which makes your stories a joy to read. When her mother spoke of Agape, it was all very insightful, almost prophetic to Ianthe. The whole Ianthe's birth made her feel even more like an outsider. Interesting. *faery tragedy

Demeter was never a favorite goddess to learn about, but you make her more interesting in this chapter. The prophecy at the end was chilling and reasonable; after all, we're in ancient Greece. I hope you'll put more prophecies into the story! *faery tragedy

Like you, I enjoy when chapters are short; it's easier to follow somehow. I adored the disappointing reunion between Ianthe and Eurydice. And when Eurydice comments on Andromeda, it really hits home. (More reason to root for your protagonist!) The unease about marriage was well presented at the end. I don't know what you found awkward about this chapter. *faery tragedy

I just found this little gem today. GREAT atmosphere you set up at the beginning. It's one of your best beginnings, too. And here I found the sisterly rivalry present in your other stories as well. It's neat that, in my opinion, you have this Sarika mark or something, a mannerism I suppose. Ianthe and Andromeda couldn't be any more different, could they be? I feel like Ianthe a lot, though I'm the older sibling. It's great how you captured her oppressed jealousy so well. I don't know this myth; it'll be great to see where it goes. *faery tragedy

i think you should make ianthe more tomboyish but your story is cool i love mythology like this and its fun that you combined 2 into 1. there's a book called persephone its nice you should read it i forgot the author though

I am only mildly familiar with mythology, but I find it facinating nonetheless. Your story captures a very ominous yet anticipating mood and your characters are very well written. I have enjoyed reading your story and am looking forward to your continued updates.

I really like this story. I love stories set in Ancient Greece and this is a particularly great one. I especially like the way you included Orpheus as one of the minstrels, that was really good.

I would give some constuctive critisism but I don't think that there's any I could give:).

OH you can't believe how ecstatic i was to see that you updated this story! i hope you keep up the wonderful work. it's very interesting how you placed two different myths into one story.

I absolutely loved your story, especially the characterization of Ianthe. I suffer with her in her frustration and I can feel Adromeda's nervousness. I'd enjoy to see you adding to this sometime soon...

a very interesting story! i would dearly love to see what happens next... and i love the characterization of ianthe... very strong and has a mind of her own... most depictions have persephone a bit weak at the start... this is a very refreshing change indeed! do update soon!

So far this is a really good story. It's unique in the way your telling it. Definatley adding this to my alerts so I can read more when it comes.

I like this one a lot so far. There's a flow to it, so many emotions threading around that pull at me. Ianthe's frustration and jealousy with her sister, annoyance with her cousin for admiring Andromeda - it's all very real without giving up any historical feel to it.

oh i'm so excited to see that you've decided to rewrite this story! To be honest, i've never read a fic of this myth written quite like yours. Its very unique and interesting of how Persephone was actually Ianthe in her younger years... I'll be sure to keep an eye out for your next update.