that's pretty! what is the structure of a sijo? I really like how you have darkness, light, and their child: the shadow.

it's a great poem/sijo! i love the way you did it. angsty, again, but your angst makes you a great poet.

-hugs-

~syv

This is really good, despite what you may think of it. I can just picture someone standing alone like this.

I like the imagery in this, very dark and desolate.Your teacher sounds nothing like mine, mine remembers every little thing he sets us... I liked your sijo, its darkly provocative.

Veddy mysterious my lovely sasha. Spooky visuals. ^^ Quite good actually. Haha, everyone in our class who's in ficpress should post sijos. Put our wasted creativity to work. Keep writing!

Happy new year! mwah! hugs!

-dawn

after reading the last line the whole poem has a certian feeling... like wind, they way it flows... if that makes sense.