K,To add more power to your writing add substance to the story, to go along with all the "candy" i.e. romance, lost love, and fantasy aura (fairly well done by the way) However, A reader can reach the end wondering what was the point. The "point" needn't be woefully obvious, fantasy stories are for fun, but you want your reader to reach the end without the opinion that the reading is brittle, the story line nonexistent, and lacking personal style and thought from the author.This review is meant as constructive critisism with hopes that it is not unreasonably harsh. You did an admirable job of conveying Alsanders thoughts naturally. Keep writing.Kiv