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tsubaki-dono 2008-07-03 ch 23,	abuseThis story, despite being in first person (which seems to comprise the majority of the stories I read these days sheesh), is surprisingly possessive. A lot of first-person stories speak in terms of first person but are very monologue-like and bore the living daylights out of me... can't deal with that. Your character Peter was a little shaky but easy to relate to. Very human and very confused, like all the other poor sods who walk this earth. Andy made my day; I loved him. His characters was a little shaky as well but I appreciated his young and crazy persona --he's just a wild card from a messed up background. Another starring role in his own tragedy --angsty without being too heavy and just enough that we can see things close enough to his perspective to appreciate his little "cracks". He's not as stable as anyone else in the story but he was certainly quite amusing. Your dialogue was hilarious in some places! Just the conversations the characters had was entertaining as anything. I like how they react to each other and inter act they had a tone of acceptable outrageousness; people a reader could relate to yet still step back and say, "f*ck, he's insane!" I think what really threw me off the characters was the incident with Henry. It was a really gritty part of the story and I didn't really like that and neither can I see the point for the characters to have gone through that or done what they did. There didn't seem to be a purpose to that scene. I love that you threw in more real-life problems for the; Peter's family and his father's death, Andy's lack of a father but the complexities of his relationship to his now-dead step father. I loved Cassandra to bits, that precocious little snarky brat, she's a great character. Other than a few loose scenes that I totally didn't get, this fic was beautiful. Happy writing and thanks for sharing.
Deadly-moons 2008-06-28 ch 8,	abuseThis is kind of weird, but apparently Yo Quiero taco bell also translates in spanish as 'I want i mark bell' cause aparently taco translates as 'i mark'. I looked it up in two different places. Other than that, i really love your story. I think i've already put it on my favorites. (this is my second time reading it through.)
moneymakestheworldgoround 2008-06-27 ch 23,	abuse:] rly enjoyed reading this. :) very nice. i like the ending. only, there were lots of things that i thought couldve been cleared up. such as the john incident. i reckoned if that was cleared up with peter and andy knowing about it it'd be better. but overall, very nice. ^^
kirarin242 2008-05-10 ch 2,	abuseheh this is really good i luv it!^-^!XD!
strawberry buttercup 2008-04-30 ch 23,	abusei love that little bit with the plankton at the end. cute, it was all cute. loved it. thanks for a great read.
eurtreve 2008-04-28 ch 23,	abusei loved the chapter titles and your style.
jaeye 2008-04-26 ch 23, anon.	abuseNice story :) I like Peter, even though he makes my head spin. I don't get it about the carpet girl though. And is John and Carol the same John and Carol he knew back in high school? Whoa, if its is. I like how Peter had such a sucky childhood and it made his view of everything so skewed. I think you did that really well. Thanks for the story~!
Rocks Beneath the Water 2008-04-25 ch 23,	abuseOhmigod I loved this. Thanks for writing it. :)
Yellow skittles 2008-03-01 ch 17,	abuseok no more Italian dressing for me. Also never rub Bert's bees in your eyes it stings and feels oddly minty. i did it on purpose once and ran around screaming "My eyes are minty fresh!"
Lile Arresty 2008-02-18 ch 23,	abuselol All your female names started with C: Carlota, Cassandra, Christine, Clarissa, Chloe, Cindy. But I liked your story even if the end was a bit suddenly.
True.Randomness 2008-02-07 ch 23,	abuseInterestin, sarcastic, cynical, and one of the funniest series I have read in a while. This trully was a lighthearted story, which is a great escape from all the agnst stories there are now a days. I loved the conclusion and they way the story was writen in an informal way. Can't wait to read your other story...
Skyfallouch 2008-02-04 ch 23, anon.	abuseMany symbolic meanings and irony. I enjoyed the story thoughout the whole time and once again, I love your writing style! :D I look foward in reading your other stories!
XxAmericanxBeautyxX 2008-02-04 ch 23,	abuseExcellent story. I loved it!! :)
SkyFallOuch 2008-02-03 ch 6,	abuseI just started reading this story and I'm really liking it. I'm also noticing that all the girls' names start with a C. Love your writing style! :D
Rent-a-Blank 2008-02-02 ch 13,	abuseby far the best chapter yet. :D

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