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I like the rhythm in this piece. Everything flows so well. I also really like your formatting, how you play with italics and periods and all that stuff. Makes a poem much more visually interesting. Keep writing! :)

This is a great poem. And you almost made it through the whole poem without machining the tomatoes!

I absolutely love this poem. My favorite line is "Sure, one who pops pills, who can’t be saved and who’s oh-so clumsy with her r/a/z/o/r/blades." ... reminds me of myself. i wish i could pull something as good as this off! -Darkest Angels

Yet another deep poem of yours. You truly are a talented writer, but it is sad that your incredible writing skills appear to be feeding off of the pain that you are experiencing in real life. To be "a good little girl" is a very interesting line you have there in your poem. To live in this strange world today I doubt that there is a single 'normal' person, and if there are those that claim to be normal then they are most likely in denial. I would like to see one person that is truly happy, because that would be an experience indeed. At any rate, I'll stop bothering you. Very well written and done!

CheersLost in A World of Pain

That hit my heart real hard. i can follow almost every line you say. but what catches my attention the most are the lines, "I've been through too much pain to ever hope to be what most would call 'normal'" i can relate to that so much. very very good. and the ending is very powerful. this one's going on my favorite list. it just blew me away!

Sad, and very emotional. It somehow reminded me of Paulie in the movie "Lost and delirious", perhaps because I've seen that film recently. Do you know it? I think it's definitely along your lines. ;-)

wow i love this...its incredible.

Sure, one who pops pills, who can’t be saved and who’s oh-so clumsy with her r/a/z/o/r/blades.

i LOVEloveLOVE that line...absolutely amazing!

i like this as well, you did a great job with it. 'Sure, one who pops pills, who can’t be saved and who’s oh-so clumsy with her r/a/z/o/r/blades.'that was a wonderful line, great job.

This is... interesting. That's not the right word, because it's too mediocre/bland, but after having spent the last twenty minutes trying to remember the word "cryptic" for something else, it's about all I can manage.

I like it. I don't think I realized that it rhymed until almost the end, although I'm not quite sure how I missed that.

Rhyming aside, the way you formatted it works really well for the poem, and I especially like the final line. There's a bitter sort of sarcasm that's easy to relate to.

beautiful and lovely yet again. and yes, i meant to put you on my faves list.

Beautiful yet oh-so sad poem. I love the description of "mascara tears;" I don't know why but I find it so genius that a simple description could bring such a vivid picture to mind. :)

And yes, I did add you to my favorites on purpose. You're a wonderful writer and you deserve your place in everyone's favorites. :)

i LOVE the last line. amazing poem!

slightly morbid, but a good poem, keep up the good work

love it, you have raw talent and i love it. but one question to ponder is dosen't everone hve there problems that keep them from being a "good little girl"