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| D-V-E-P 2005-12-30 ch 1,  | abusethat's really sweet. i think every girl wants that. |
| AshGurl2897 2005-12-30 ch 1, | abuseSimple. Cute. |
| randompoetry 2005-12-30 ch 1, | abuseWow, this was so sweet. I simply loved it. |
| DeliriousInsanity 2005-12-30 ch 1, | abuseTouching and sweet. Though I think if you add "that" in line 3:"A kiss to show me [that]..." it might sound a bit better. I really enjoyed this poem though, good job. |
| just a teardrop 2005-12-30 ch 1, | abusethis is lovely. i really like the format, with a line for each kiss (and, of course, 16 kisses!)- nice work! |