Didn't you write this story years ago and didn't it have a lot more than this. with i think two possible endings?. I don't know I'm just sure that I read something like this in High school

cool i like this story post more plz

Sounds great!

alright, it is improved a little.

Im not big on reviews so I dont really know what to put except that I like it so far and Im pretty sure there is no disease that starts with X...but then again I'm not a doctor...

And could I read the org. version?

i think i'd like to read this story else were if you aren't going to post more for a long long time.
i liked this chapter too though. the bath was fun. but the chapter was too short!

great first chapter. i really like the immagry with the slobber and the truck scene and the bandaids. =] please update again soon

Oh this is fun! Well written, too. I can't wait to find out what the catch with the dog is. Update pronto, please!

Awesome ficlet. I bet a hundred percent that's no ordinary 'dog'. I definitely can't wait to read more. Good grammar, very refreshing style and good flow. Nice humor to it too. Keep it up !

~Jo

I really love your writing style! Keep it up!

What is going on with Annie? Did Shader do something to her when he hit her on the head? Which ending or you going to continue with? They are both really good. I can't wait to read more. Keep writing!!

Very interesting. I am very picky about stories but I really like this one. Keep writing!

Hmm...I think I like version 2 of chapter 6 better...but i'd want you to somehow go back to the previous situation in chapter 6 version 1. That was very suspenseful. :)
I love how you put Shader into a skirt. Perfectly bloody awesome.
Keep the writing up. I really enjoy getting into the head of Annie. She's "positively radiant". XD

So did Annie say yes or not? I hope she does because I really would like to know more about Shader! Anyway.. this is a great story! And thank you for reviewing mine!!

great story! i like the tone--some stories take themselves way too seriously. but it's also rare that one finds a colloquially written story that is insipid or reads like it was written by a junior high student at a sleepover party. kudos to you! also, good character consistency. keep updating!