I really like this story, it reminds me of something familar. Is the title from a song? you might not of named it after a song, but I could of swore that it was from a song.

M... good chapter =D A few grammar things here and there but overall there aren't a lot of problems there. It's good and now that you've established the relationship between them you might want to consider adding in some more characters to keep it interesting and such. Keep it up- you're doing great =D

Hm hmSo I totally know what you mean about not being able to tell someone how you feel *is currently experiencing the awfulness of that*

Interesting way to take this- I like it. Imagery and vivid descriptions are always a good thing [as long as you don't have so much that you get away from your plot] and they help lengthen it a bit and let the reader feel more in touch with the story. You're a good writer so I only have two main critiques: 1. Longer chapters2. Okay, so you have two stories up. Try to bounce between the two instead of starting more stories because before you know it you have five one chapter stories that you're never going to finish and it's important to strive towards finishing =D

Keep it up! I like your stuff because I think you're very in touch with it emotionally- and that's a good thing! Great job =D