Oh my goodness... that was truly beautiful- it had a great, constant flow from start to finish and it kind of created a melody (in my mind at least lol) Amazing poem. P.S. Kinda off topic but... You're only two days older than me! Weird... O.o

This is my favourite of all of yours. Smooth and exquisite! I really like this one.

Wow great poem! It has beautiful rhythm and great diction!

Oh yes, hello again. Sorry I haven't really been doing much lately- more concerned making some major modifications. Well, technically I don't live in Fresno, I actually live in Clovis (but I am just a block away from Clovis/Fresno boundary lol). I attend BHS, not as bad a school as some people tend to think.

Brilliant Poem!! The short snappy lines work really well! four and a half out of five thumbs up!!

Nice poem. Good job.

Beautifully written, though the part where you wrote "that wealth beyond measure" seems to throw the structure a bit off. Anyways very descriptive imagery and I love the ending. Good job.