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| letylyf 2006-01-04 ch 18, anon. | abuseThat last chapter was very powerful and moving. I really like how you've set up each front, without having it all become too confusing (although the proliferation of names beginning with B definitely doesn't help). It almost seems like the story's coming to an end, although surely there's a lot more to tell. |
| letylyf 2006-01-04 ch 9, anon. | abuseUm, yeah. An interesting story, but it's seeming more and more like your own version of LotR. Not exactly, of course, and I'm still very interested in your characters. Post more soon. |
| letylyf 2006-01-03 ch 7,  | abuseYay, it's Gandalf! Just kidding... but this is shaping to be a great epic, and while the rather... euphuistic... writing style isn't my favorite, this is an exciting story and I can't wait to find out what happens to Anest and Lily, two very wonderful characters. |
| letylyf 2006-01-03 ch 1, | abuseI can already tell that this is better than a lot of published sci-fi/fantasy material I've read. The style seems a bit different from your other work, more old-fashioned, I guess. I'm not saying what I mean very well, but this looks like a really good story. |
| gsmonks 2006-01-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseI'll give your comments all the notice they deserve. I'll also present my story as I see fit. Thank-you for travelling Greyhound. |
| Arn 2006-01-02 ch 1, | abuseit would be nice if you hadn't put the table of contents. It has no apparent purpose (as I see it) and I hope you will take it down immediatly. It is unnecessary, what the hell where you thinking. Also it would be nice if you didn't put "book one" or something, it really puts the reader off (for some abstruse reason) and thus no one will read your story. Stop it. Your arrogance is showing. Other than that the story looks good so far. Hm...Belloc, an OK name. Oh well. X-Eragon-X X-Eragon-X |