This is a very stormy, complex poem... I particulary love the first four lines, the first and third lines sound like confident statements, the second and fourth like whispers or echoes. Another one that desperately needs to be said out loud cos its well theatrical.

Also negativeness sounds fine i dont think it is grammatically correct BUT negativity doesnt fit it would have too many syllables i reckon.

Gotta say though the word cute is somehow very disturbing in this peom! More so than words like anger and dark!

Ah. This is good, really good. You make your point clear, but still use imagery and metaphors, and I like that. One thing--"negativeness" could be replaced by "negativity." Being lazy, I don't feel like checking, but I'm not sure if negativeness is a word. If it is, ignore me. :) ~A. Person

this is good :D what about the beginning bit of the other poem? cause that was good, too, but i cant find it on here... anyway, its a lot better now, very good!