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| Black and White Dreams 2006-03-13 ch 1,  | abusewow. powerful... very powerful... and deep... nice job! love, Caitlin |
| Kelpylion 2006-02-14 ch 1, | abuseHeartwrenchingly realistic and well-presented. Blunt and anti-euphemistic, which is what's needed. |
| angel953 2006-02-04 ch 1, | abusedeep...i guess?! |
| xx-cronopio-xx 2006-01-22 ch 1, | abuseI like the formatting. "same to/YOU/shot her husband because he couldn't speak English," -- original without being overtly flamboyant. The message, as well, is an intriguing perspective -- one that is sometimes not altogether often enough applied to the labels traditionally associated with war. This piece gives a two-dimensional angle on the price of war, for both parties involved -- great job. Adieu, Kat |
| mormonboy 2006-01-16 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is really deep. It is so sad that someone would shoot their spouce for such a crazy reason. This is deep, and I would like for you to explain it to me. |
| Grey Eyed Oblivion 2006-01-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseI'm back, ready to read your updates and what an update it is. I mean wow, this poem was so raw and powerful. I loved it! So graphic in so little words. My friend is going to join the army, it's kind of scary... |
| adu937 2006-01-08 ch 1, | abuseso heart-breaking... |
| hoowdoideletethisaccount 2006-01-06 ch 1, | abuseEvocative. Thought-provoking. Very, very sad. I'm not anti-war, entirely; I mean, if it has to be done, it has to be done (especially in the case of people fighting to protect themselves, their homes, their families). But in a perfect world there would be no war. And this is why. Very sad piece, and very well-done. |
| cornered.sensations 2006-01-05 ch 1, | abuseso blunt and powerful... |
| agirlnamed-aly 2006-01-04 ch 1, | abuseThis left me speechless. Which why I don't really have much to say except... Thanks so much for this. It was like a punch to the stomach - intense and powerful. xoxo Aly |
| Sarah-Brighteyes 2006-01-01 ch 1, | abuseI felt alot of differnt things as I read this. First off let me say, sorry for taking so long to reveiw your new pieces, I took a mini-vaca from fictionprss, so I have a ton of catching up to do. I guess I took this piece as something from a friend of mines P.O.V.He just got back from Iraq and was discharged because of medical issues. He was in a car bombing where a girl was killed as well as a few other people. he was wounded in the process. Anywho, I guess I found this very sad. Almost painstakingly guilty about death. I love your writing style though. Your poetry always makes me think in circles. I love doing that. Excellent piece of writing. As always Dear Aslan. |
| elvenstorm 2006-01-01 ch 1, | abuseThat is an extremely strong, powerful poem. It's horrible thinking what these people ust be going through and this is an excellent testement to them. Well done. |
| breezy nostrils 2005-12-31 ch 1, | abusewow that really impacted me emotionally. you have a way with words. keep up the good work! |
| just a teardrop 2005-12-31 ch 1, | abusewow... i love this. very powerful. |
| a lonely september 2005-12-31 ch 1, | abusei loved the last verse. this was all so amazing & so different. great job. |