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AluminumMuse
2007-07-07
ch 1,
abuseVery good, although in a few parts the flow seems disturbed.
Example:
Can you call this freedom when I’m told to die for you
And leave my mind a shell

In some places, you used metaphors that do not seems to add to the over all feeling.
Example:
Especially when salt licks melt on my cheeks

Other than that, though, I really enjoyed it.
-Feather La
multiples of six
2005-12-31
ch 1,
abuseIt's definitely not sexual. (No, that doesn't mean I hate it!) Parts of it are going over my head in my current distracted mood. ("You whip em and they seem to like it more.") But anyway. I do like the rhythm. I love the lines "I can’t hold onto nothingness in hell, my Lady,/Especially when salt licks melt on my cheeks." And. Yeah. =)
Inherent
2005-12-31
ch 1,
abuseWow, I thought the lines that you showed me on MSN were good but now that I read it all together... it's amazing. The way you used certain words and such to get what you're saying across is really wonderful.

Don’t strike me down, my Lord,Just because I’m not as foolish as you’re wishing

I really, really, truly love that line.

Yeah, my review sounds stupid since it just kinda 'barfed' onto Word. But still.
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