id say you pulled it off!nice one

I love this - very entertaining! I've read it again and again, great characters!

I LOVED this, I figured. out the action right away (grins shiftily).

"Damn kids..."

BEST ENDING EVER.

Baaaaaaaa,

Ewe.

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First, I'd like to say that straight dialog scenes are a "style" of writing which many writers have adopted, including me. So it can't be ripped off. :) I like this (your story's) straight dialog style. And, yes, I could visualize these two high school "friends" having this conversation while standing near their lockers in between classes. But this is a long conversation for 5 minutes. :) However, your syntax, punctuation, spelling, and formatting are all good! Just two things: Jesse says, "I have no idea what is this 'class' of which you speak..." which seems to be out of context with the way he speaks in rest of the dialog. And, in the same sentence, "Jesse" states that Noah "didn't tell me you started foreign language..." which doesn't make sense to me; in a prior sentence, "Noah" asks Jesse if he "had somewhere else to be, like class...". Otherwise, I think this story would make a great episode for a teen drama, i.e. "90210". Good job!

aww that was so cute! :)

really cute

Yeah, you did succeed. Great job! Like it, too.

I don't know if you're still active on this site, but I found this story today and can't resist letting you know how much I enjoyed it. It was pretty easy to follow, I only got lost once or twice, but that's probably just me, your clues helped fill in the blanks. Really adorable oneshot.

Interesting without description - it works! Cute :)

That was one of the best dialogue pieces I've ever read! Good job.

lmao. sweet. cute. perfection.

LOL! cute, hilarious, and droolable XD

Awesome. I could tell exactly who was who, probably because of Noah's stand-out personality:) Gotta love Noah, bad humour and all, and I've gotta love Jesse for his cute sensibilities!

This made me laugh so many times in so many random ways...

And I really could tell who was speaking when. You did a really good job of that. And the anticlamatic end only makes the story that much cuter.

(I didn’t know about you and then the whole sexual identity thing and small towns and gay movies and well, you see what I’m saying.) I love boys who ramble!

Sequel? I think that's a marvelous idea.