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| McDeath13 2006-12-23 ch 1,  | abuseThis story is Awesome!I totally love sadistic stories! |
| Dark Goddess Vanmoriel 2006-02-27 ch 1, | abuseOhmeegawd! This is my first time on this site, and I have to say, that was AWESOME!! i love the language you used. very descriptive. Not a lot of people use verbal rape in their stories, and i find that really interesting. If that happened to me, I would probably cook him the best dinner i could make, haha. |
| Shadow Gryphon 2006-01-17 ch 1, | abuseThat was impressive. Odd, because I could completely understand the cental character, even though he would be the sort of person I would hate. But still very, very good. |
| DamnGlitch 2006-01-02 ch 1, | abuseYeowch! I looked through and there was a hell of a lot of 'you's that should have been 'yours'. Very embarrassing. Thanks for the heads up, it should be fixed now :) |
| dreamshell 2006-01-02 ch 1, | abusesadistic and bizarre. i enjoyed it very much. the only thing i would say is that there are a lot of places where 'you' should be 'your' or possibly 'you're' (depending on the context). but i'm sure you're aware of that by now, soon shall be. anyways, this was enticing. i like the vague references that tell the reader the narrator is not quite human. and the silent Cherub, creepy indeed. in certain places this reminded me of A Clockwork Orange and American Psycho. good things, i assure you. good work. ;) |
| LaChoclaNilla 2006-01-02 ch 1, | abusefreaky sick man |
| Lauren Wolfe 2006-01-02 ch 1, | abuseInteresting story! I thoroughly enjoyed it. It's interesting what a little darkness in the background can do wonders for a story. I can actually "experience" the character's feelings. Very good! Keep it up! |