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xx-cronopio-xx 2006-01-06 ch 1,	abuseOh, God. This is epic. (Breathes in after extended period). I hate to leave gushing reviews like these, without even the friendliest of constructive criticisms, but in this case, I simply have no choice. (and no, I'm not being flippant.) :) I think that u have established ur-self well as a fine poet on this site. This is a perfect gem, the clear result of industrious work and well-channeled emotions. Most brilliant lines: - "because she got a out of looming over unmapped territory and retracing constellations, a feral - "when she would have rathered I thirst out of devotion" - excellent - "isn't nearly as satisfying as having her here to ignore it for me"- "that trussed me to her bedposts and her resolutions" Adieu, Kat
HiddenFlame42 2006-01-04 ch 1,	abuseQuite cool! I really liked the style you wrote it in, almost like a monologue but yet still poetic. (If that makes any sense.) Thanks for the reviews btw! :)
Fit of Destiny 2006-01-02 ch 1,	abuseI absolutely LOVE IT!
La Gitane 2006-01-02 ch 1,	abuseI quite liked this, actually. It was longer than usual, but the story was quite compelling... you managed to create quite a sense of character of both the speaker and the girl. You depicted the differences between them both quite nicely. And importantly, you didn't spell it out as is always a danger with longer poems, so well done. Lines like 'whisky breath/over frozen skin' were nice, as were observations about his argyle wearing! However, somewhere you wrote about drowning spirals, which is definitely a cliche to stay clear of. Not sure italising 'always' at the end was necessary either, but I did like your other decisions to italise various words... I thought it was effective. Quite nicely done, in other words. :)

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