Wow love this...reminds me of my slutty sister...but we wont go into that.

"So where are the ** morals?Sweet nothings in my ear!And once awake you'll see you're**ed up for life, my dear" I loved that part! it was freaking Awsome! keep it up. :)

it's a harsh topic with an unsypathtic language and distrust. Though, i have to say, it's very good. it's written well and dwells on the topic appropiatly. it's so dark and dreary that it's hard to turn away. you kept my attention the whole time. great remarkable job.

i like this... ive had girls try to steal my bf... it's very cool and well done.. kinda funny though

o0o0o good job on this

I liked it actually, its very angry, harsh and brutually honest . . . I like that. This is going in my favorites. I love your work.

First off, glad to see you writing again. Secondly, this piece is good . . . you didn't let your anger control you, you controlled it. Smart piece in the sense that you used your anger well and still slammed the poser . . . and lots of good lines, normally I hate the rhymes, but you did it right. Great job Kasey.

Whoa... So many good lines, it's hard to pick which ones I liked the best.

"Black lipstick smeared upon you,

begging for more and more

And it's your fantasy to

become a gothic **"

LOL, that one had me dying in laughter...although, "free and affordable" was equally funny, mainly because there's so many people in my school who are, "free and affordable".

Good work Kasey, and thanks for the reviews. I'll be updating Niilo tonight or later this week.

Write more, soon! ;)

~C.B.

WOW! I hate the ** posers who're whores... they make the rest of us look bad... Gothic isn't about clothes... it's a mind set... I'm not really that Gothic but a lot of my friends are... and I hate backstabbing ** who think they can steal your boyfriend... if he does go for her then they belong together cause he wanted the filthy **... but if he didn't then claw her ** eyes out! Sorry for the ranting... ya got me in a writing mood now... I'm gonna put this baby on my fav. stories list! I love the rhyming... you didn't even stop to think when you wrote this did you? Man I tell ya anger feuls the best writings! Do you have a myspace?

I felt like you tried too hard here. I like the use of rhyme in a rather serious subject: it keeps the poem from becoming too dark, but it also adds another level that most "gothic" writers are too chicken to try out.

"And it's your fantasy tobecome a gothic **"

I'd just change this to "And it's always been your fantasy//To become a gothic **." It has a better ring to it.

Harsh words but a great poem. I loved the wording, you used the right expressions at the right times and even took me by surprise once or twice. Well done.