wow...i like the idea...and the tone is nice...the ironies are awesome...although i think you should've separated the poem in diff. stanzas...each stanza starting with the blah blah pretty girl i think...that would make a better effect...i also used the same style in my poem "The Dance of the Ballerina"...kindly check it out if you have the time...and my other poems as well...

truly yours...

oh wow I love this so much. I love the repeated 'pretty girl' I love the whole thing. This is really good.

wow that is brilliant. 'now you're just a teenage statistic' - wonderful line, it gets to the true meaning of the poem. this was really good, well written, flowed really well. great.