I don't thin this is rubbish. I like it was very well written and I enjoyed it.

Nice job. keep wrting thanks for the review.

Sincerely,

the Stranger in the moonlight.

Hey Caroline

It's not rubbish you crazy british loon!

Ha ha

yes of course your the "caroline" in my profile thinger majig(

To be honest I cannot write poetry – free form or versed – very well either. In fact, I confine myself to haiku or vent my emotions out in vignettes for this very reason. This poem while possessing few poetic techniques I believe to be simply fine as it is. It conveys your emotion and to me this is all that matters at times. I can empathise with your anguish and three simple words in this piece really made me pause for a second: “lose my hurt”. Wouldn’t it wonderful if we could all simply shed ourselves of our pains and burdens? Well I hope you feel better after writing this piece and sharing your emotions to passing readers. As a friend once told me, “shared happiness is double happiness, shared pain is halved pain.”

Autumn.

You know, for a first-time poetry-writer, this was excellent. It isn't rubbish at all. I love the way you described everything and I love how you realised that poetry can help you let your emotions out. Simply beautiful.

your poem is very good. your reason to write is the same reason i have: to get emotions out. would you review some of my poems, please? espcially since this your first poem on fictionpress, personally i think you did a great job, similar to how i write, through emotions. i don't think, i just write, and by what you said about your poem, it sounds like you do also. keep writing, it helps. you are a very good writer.