 bleed gilead 2006-01-05 . chapter 1the vocabulary is mature and the imagery is powerful, i like your alliteration, especially when all the words are linked with a common theme of disgust and intensity. but i don't quite think bubble gum fits with everything else (it seems too happy and everything for this). i would also think to expand the theme of "loss of innocence" as most of it is about pain instead. |