This is gorgeous. I love it. All the images paint this beautiful picture of sex and smoke. Mm. That didn't make any sense, but yeah, I love it. Favoriting. Keep writing! :)

ohgod. this has got to be one of my favorite pieces i've read. it blows me away. this is getting a favorites. and after the great work i've read from you? you are too. : )

this is a sweet story... especially the ending... nicely done... less abstraact than usual and still amazing

Independence. I like the difference in the message here; it's not one I often see.

I had to read it like seven times(no joke) until I got it. I swear I thought she was in the backseat of a car until the seventh read when I got it. Duh me. Great poem though. I'm just tired.

"but

i’d never take it."

hey i think i remember you using a phrase like this before. that's exciting. he. lovely poem bud.

(red t-shirts, anyone?)

you captured a moment simply, and without any pretension. good job.

Wonderful imagaery!