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| sakine 2007-06-15 ch 1,  | abusewow. very expressive. you communicated beautifully (maybe 'cause I can relate a bit, too?) But, rhetorically, weren't you happier basking in His love than fighting Him so you can pretend to be master of your life? That's the way I've felt, anyway... But who am I to speak? I can relate all to well! |
| emizulu 2006-03-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseWell written! I love poems about religious uncertainty, because they are often so raw and contain emotion, never dry or boring. Truth comes through, and the reader doesn't walk away feeling cheated. Very very good, keep it up. |
| Singing After Dark 2006-01-28 ch 1, | abusei coudnt resist. its about God. Philophy is like my passion so here's what i got to say: You're never to cold to save. Everday I try hard to be like a good person and christian, but sometimes it sucks. haha honesly. But the thing is, my friends and family keep me knowing what love really is and it keeps me going. Here's my preach of the day: God loves you. No matter what happens, you're never too cold to save. |
| Darkday Chaos 2006-01-25 ch 1, | abuseWow. Wowzow. This has got to be the most ingenious poems I've read from you so far. (I work my way from the top down.) I do feel just like that sometimes. DDC Wow. |
| L. X. Petrik 2006-01-24 ch 1, | abuseI FEEL THAT WAY TOO! ... You're not dating any one are you? *shifty eyes* J/K (sorta) Over all i like the poem, but it's not my taste to have it so concret. I would stray more to the abstact thoughts, but that gets boring. This seems to serve your perpose, and I dare say, I like it. |
| wonderland is different now... 2006-01-21 ch 1, | abusewowwowWOW. i really like this. this is how i feel about church. this is amazing. *claps*~melissa |
| ReynaVera 2006-01-11 ch 1, | abuseI feel the same way, BTW I'm a Catholic, but I don't no longer have faith in God. Not by choice... |
| Faerie Energy 2006-01-11 ch 1, | abuseThe five closing lines are wonderful. Well written, and the emotions are delivered well. Some of the rythm is off, but I may just be reading it wrong. With all due respect, Faerie Energy |
| Jesus-freak 2006-01-07 ch 1, | abuseThis poem really spoke to me. I think largely because it represents a lot of how I feel right now. The flow of the poem worked perfectly, and the words you used cut things straight to the point of what you were saying, which has a powerful effect. It's strange how after having experienced so much of God's love, and light, his works, that we can still begin to doubt, and begin to partially want a life away from it all. You can have all the faith in the world, and then you start out into situations that are new, a world you've never experienced, and suddenly your faith begins to fade. You're bombarded with ideals and perspectives that not only challenge what you believe, but make sense, and it becomes harder and harder for you to argue against them. |
| samwise606 2006-01-06 ch 1, | abuseI like this one, and I really know what you mean. Even when we try to follow God, there's always a part of us that wants to turn away. Good rhyme, nice meter, and I liked the maggots writihing in bone line. Descriptive, even if its a gross mental image. Good job overall though.-Samwise |
| Needa S 2006-01-06 ch 1, | abuseYa may leave Jesus, but he will never forsake you. I hope you come to realize it soon. Great job putting this together. Keep on writing. |
| Scott Kinsky 2006-01-05 ch 1, | abusegreat and amazing poetry |