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Katterree Fengari
2006-05-06
ch 1,
abuseat least you got the "farewell"...I like that "silky patterns weave" ...for some reason, I thought about someone getting run over by a truck...yea..dunno
With Rhyme and Reason
2006-01-05
ch 1,
abuseVery good. I've never liked the haiku (I feel it's too short--there's not enough space to actually get a point across), but I like THIS haiku. You use the syllables wisely: "Silky patterns weave / On this road of cold rain"--beautiful lines, right there. And the last line sums it up.

I can almost see the images you're thinking about. Nice job.
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