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| Brian Ledgers 2006-02-27 ch 1,  | abuseI just got finished reading almost all your poems and i have to say this is suprisingly good Good Job keep the good ones comin |
| FallBreeze 2006-01-12 ch 1, | abuseI really like the last few lines--they just sound very original and lovely. And from reading a few of your other pieces, I think you write so well, and do have some really unique, deep piece and I feel like you could be digging much deeper into yourself to describe the feelings (especially the first part that rhymes heart and apart). I hope this helps, I'll be back to read more! :) |
| Jodie Sinclair 2006-01-07 ch 1, | abuseok one i think you rhyming(you know i cnat spell) are better than any of your other ones and two i thought you might like "It drowns it out" |
| FunkyFlower17 2006-01-07 ch 1, | abusebeautiful as always, tho i like the beginning way better than the ending. u mite wanna improve the rhyme scheme and the wording, especially for the last 4 lines. otherwise, sad and touching. good luck! ~mez~ |
| Celeste Se'oir 2006-01-06 ch 1, | abuseI'm sorry for not reveiwing lately... but you last few weren't all that great in my opinion and I hate to say that in sometimes. Especially since i do really love your work. This one is much better. It has the emotion along with complete thoughts and rhythme. Keep at it, i do love your poems. Later,~Ffuffy~ |
| Melissa O'Day 2006-01-06 ch 1, | abuseThis is so sad, but yet, wonderful. I totally relate |
| just a teardrop 2006-01-06 ch 1, | abusei can relate to this. nice work! keep writing! |