very cool. very cool rhyming (rap-like), very difficult subject, but you've managed to express your contempt/pity/desire to help but inability to do so.

I loved hearing your view on self harmers...i love this:This relief won’t set you free...It traps you here don’t you see... i loved the summary and i loved reading that line in this... i thought it summed up self harm...people do it for some kind of control..but in fact they have no control over themselves...

genious!! keep writing!

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