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| Chi Ame 2006-02-17 ch 1,  | abuseThis has a cool, creepy, powerful edge behind it... I think it could use some fine-tuning though. Since it looks like it's already in some kind of structure, (you may already know this, but:) you just pick a set amount of syllabels per line and stick with it the whole way. So a stanza struture could be: Line 1: 5Line 2: 7Line 3: 5Line 4: 7 Sorry if I'm repeating something you already knew, it just seems like following a rhyme scheme is appropriate in this poem, and would make it even more powerful and readable. |