Reviews for Wishing Upon A Star

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R. M. Kent 2008-03-13 ch 10,	abuseI'm loving it. I read all chapters in one go and can't wait to read more! Think the story is so interesting and am looking forward to reading what Alaina does next.
nope 2008-03-11 ch 10, anon.	abusei'm very interested in this story and can't wait to see it updated. i find your writing style very easy and enjoyable to read- the plot moves quickly enough to be engaging without sacrificing character development or descriptive imagery. if it weren't for the character that alaina is and the time period, i would say she's too good and moral, but you make her goodness seem very natural and believable. the fact that she's struggling with moral decisions and actually thinking of becoming a prostitute shows that she isn't too good to be true. nicely done - update soon :)
flea writer 2008-03-10 ch 1,	abusei really liked the first chapter... and i will read the following chapters that you have posted later when I have time. I like your writing, although I do have one suggestion, what does Alaina look like? You've given detailed explainations of the other characters, and I like those. Perhaps you should tell what color her eyes are, her hair? Are they the sapphire blue of the ocean or is her hair textured with curls beyond measure? Like I said, I like your writing style, I just was wondering about Alaina :) God bless.
crazyfish666 2008-03-10 ch 10,	abuseHm, nice, I can't wait for the next chapter. Just a few grammar things I picked up; near the beginning you say Madam Corbeau is "no more taller", it has to be 'more tall', or 'taller', but I imagine you know that :) typing too fast is a bother; second, near the end, you have Jonathon say "You bet there is" when referring to plural books, it should be 'you bet there are', if this is a deliberate thing pertaining to how he talks that is fine, but I thought I would bring it up. Otherwise all is well, really I am just nit-picking, I love it.
crazyfish666 2007-03-08 ch 8,	abuseI just read these last two chapters, very good writing. Please get some more up soon!
Sarika 2006-11-03 ch 1,	abuseHello. I've just started reading this story. I think I like it so far. I'm curious about what will happen to Alaina next- especially after her bumping into the clergyman. I like your characters and I feel like I want to know more about them... and I usually care more about what goes on in a story if I find the characters interesting. It might be my fault as a reader, but I was a little confused as to what was going on. Maybe it's the long descriptions. And William bothered me a little bit- well, his laughing. He sounded too sinister- even though I know he's supposed to be like that. Anyways, keep up the good work and I'll be sure to come back and read more!- Sarika
kristy23 2006-06-19 ch 6,	abuseThis is really very good. I like the original concept and although it's kind of dragging a bit, I have a feeling you're headed some place great. Keep up the good work!
completely anonymous 2006-03-19 ch 5, anon.	abuseI'm so glad you finally wrote another chapter. I was about to give up on you! Its been so long I almost forgot what had happened, but it didn't take me too long to remember. The flashback helped some.
Ghost Love Score 2006-03-19 ch 5,	abuseGood work! I can't wait for the next chapter.
castaways and cutouts 2006-03-19 ch 5,	abuseFantabulous! Finally an update! Nicely done!
completely anonymous 2006-01-16 ch 4, anon.	abuseIts not that boring, plus every story has its slow points. If this is the most boring part of this one, its going to be good.
castaways and cutouts 2006-01-16 ch 4,	abuseso now she's working in a sweatshop? I'm confused, I thought she was a **. But otherwise, wonderful chapter except for the confusing part which is all my fault anyway. Update soon!
completely anonymous 2006-01-14 ch 3, anon.	abuseoh, this is so sad, i can't wait to find out how she deals with this though.
Princess-Laurel 2006-01-13 ch 3,	abuseVery good story. I would like to see waht Alaina decides. Keep writing. :)
WhiteSnow 2006-01-12 ch 3,	abuseThis story holds a lot of promise. However, there are several spelling/grammatical errors, more description is needed, and it runs the risk of becoming too melodramatic. The plot is innovative, and I am curious as to further developments.

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