Reviews for p l a s t i c hearts

Reviews For: p l a s t i c hearts

Leaving Here 2006-09-16 ch 1,	i love how you wrote it
Finger Dingbat 2006-04-09 ch 1,	very pretty, it made me think - can you really define anyone? i doubt i can define myself. keep up the beautiful writing
OryssaV 2006-01-24 ch 1,	i could comment on your formatting, everyone else did, but i guess you know this: it is interesting. unusual even. but it is the very first thing that catches the attention of the reader. i really enjoyed the color imagery. you appeal to my senses very quickly, because i can see the red and blood, and the orange and pink. its cute.the image you create of a heart, "... a network of veins and/ Systematically pumped." at first susprised me. i stopped for a moment and really though about. it is just as you say: "(How/ shall the hearts true shape/ be known;/ spirit made manifest?)/ if only… flesh was transluscent."but it isn't. and i don't think it would be a pretty sight if skin was transluscent. the ending is good. it fits. "r e a l i s e s: that she is (in essence) Undefinable. …Opaque." I really enjoyed your poem.
notso darling 2006-01-11 ch 1,	there are some very vivid lines in this.
Leeona Trance 2006-01-10 ch 1,	Beautiful! I like the comparison between the plastic hearts and a real one. The last line is my favorite one. The mention of fluorescent lights at the beginning makes me think of school. The whole poem made me think of pretending to fit in... that's probably not right, but it's a great poem! So many ways to interpret it. Amazing. ~Leeona Trance
in theory 2006-01-08 ch 1,	The only way I think the erratic structure "detracts" from the overall effect is that it takes longer to fit together when reading it. It's a little more gluey to wade through than regular stanzas. It's a hallmark of a deep, well thought out piece though so it's not a bad thing. I haven't read the poem you said this was similar to, and I enjoyed this just the same. Not entirely sure why spaces are put in between words and such, maybe to put more emphasis on each letter (I mean the title). I like anyway.
les petits bateaux 2006-01-08 ch 1,	I think the time that you took in this really paid off. The whole structure was simply beautiful and the words - more like your approach - was spectacularly amazing. The last part really caught me. This was very very well done and I enjoyed every single word.
Toastntea 2006-01-08 ch 1,	I really like this. Personally I think the structure adds to it, but then again I am a fan of unusual structures Only bit I'm not sure about structurally are the bits where you've run words together like this: (cottoncandyPINK lipstickRED gumballORANGE) it's a little hard to read, breaks up the flow a bit
primal injection 2006-01-08 ch 1,	I think the erratic structure just enhances the overall effect. The language in this is magnificent and reads beautifully. The second time i read it outloud and despite the structure it had such a good flow. Really enjoyed this, time well spent...
whatsLefTof.me. 2006-01-08 ch 1,	Nice♫ ^_^ Liked this one☺

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