Amazingly written. I like the ending part...beautiful. ^^

This is a good story...when's the next chapter coming up? i did say i would review ur stories after all...

Okay, beautiful piece in idea. But on the punctuation front, we have some issues. (Pick, pick, pick, that's all I do.)On the second paragraph, "silver coated" feels strange to read. Try "silver-coated" instead. Reads smoother. The second sentence in the third paragraph, you need a comma before your closing quotation marks. And the last sentence of the second paragraph, you used "pending uncertanties." Plain old "uncertainties" would perhaps look better here.

Okay, now that we have the ugly stuff out of the way, let's get to the compliments. Beautiful imagery...I can practically see myself reflected in the mirror this way, can feel the sweat against my skin. I love your use of descriptive words, it gives the piece a wonderful feel. Your style is unique!

Another amaizing piece by Marioh, sigh, why must you continue to put me in shame? hahaha. i thought this was a very interesting piece, both by the content with which it deals as well as how it deals with it, focusing more on the actions portrayed by the mirror than by the person reflected instead. That is both creative and quite intuitive, I believe reflections can sometimes be more truthful than the one reflected. With that said, I also think that there is a certain amount of repetition, of the words "truth" for example, and "mirror", although these are keywords to the story, I believe that there are more effective ways of repeating a point, perhaps throught the use of similar structures, for example:"yeah, he had a car, a stock, and probably owned half of america" - all the things described show an image of richness, yet this conjunction of the images in one sentence I find would work well in this piece, maybe as a future addition. Hum...another thing I see is that you use the word "the" in front of words like truth and mirror, which of course is necessary, but I thin sometimes taking out the word "the" can make a sentence stronger. For example in your last paragrahp, you begin with "the shards", I believe that "shards" alone would be a stronger beggining, but that is just my opnion. Once again Marioh, you have proved to have a great ability in your writing, especially when it comes to the imagery and your style. keep up the good work!xo - Acrobia

i like it! good piece.

the " ‘‘What he saw was too abstract and distant from his life’’ he told himself" works well because it is being spoken in the third person much like an image in a mirror.

w00t.

great work.. awesome use of imagery and metaphors

nice work! i loved it. emotions start hitting me, uh! ^^ ...oh, if you have time, please read my works too.

"the mirror was a portal to a distant reality" --how figurative, i like!

NJ!

signed, joedore