There was a lovely little scene playing in my head as I read this. This poem was well done, a nice convey of emotions. Though the rhyming got to me from time to time, especially in the end.

Wow, that was powerful. The rhyme works really nicely in this, b/c it doesn't seem too forced. And the message was a really good one. Nice work. Keep writing! :)

wow this is great :D the story is touching, and the rhythm works perfectly. nice work!

whosh that was cool! awesome to be infact. write!

this is really good.. i like the story in it.. reading it out loud sounds really good..

I liked this poem. Reading this aloud sounds great, the words just roll of your tongue, especially the ryhming words.