Reviews for it's the chemicals

Reviews For: it's the chemicals

With Rhyme and Reason 2006-01-14 ch 1,	abuseWhoa. Deep. Before I launch right into the review, I have a couple of confessions. Number One: I probably wouldn't have read this in story form; and Number Two: I'm an extremely traditional, close-minded conservative. With those "ideas" in mind, here's my review. I don't like free verse very much. I'm being honest with you. A lot of times I think it signifies laziness-you know, just the general lack of desire to want to WORK on a piece of poetry. But I LIKED this free verse. Your different line lengths confused me for awhile (I kept trying to figure out why they were certain lengths) but then I just stopped thinking about it and let the poem "wash over me," as they say. As a poem, I thought it was very good. It was very original. You handle such a "taboo" topic with extreme caution and, at the same time, by some act of God or gods or another supernatural force, you manage to insert HUMOR into it without offending anyone. As mentioned about, I'm conversative, so I'm not totally pro-homosexuality. That doesn't mean I think it's wrong. It's the way I was raised. My parents are homophobic, so it's taking me awhile to be accepting (nothing against you-damn this world!). That said, about your poem being good, your "structure" being good, and me being a stupid bigot, here are some of my favorite parts: "except, they have no hair / I think / so I guess I’ll pass on that Tibetan one / but, asexual, yeah." -Nice. Sometimes I have issues deciding on what I want to do with my life "romantically" and I usually think to myself, "Would it be that difficult to become a nun or something? That'd be cool. Me and God. Only God doesn't like me. **. Perhaps I'll be a hermit. Or a hobbit. I like hobbits. They get to eat a lot of cake and see wizards! I think it would be fun to see a wizard and a dragon. I wonder where my stuffed animal dragon is. Probably in my room back home. But I thought I packed him in my college boxes. Damn. Where was this going?" --Enough said on THAT particular topic, I guess. "high cheekbones and a coy smile"--Indeed. Why do some people have to look perfect and others have to look "less than" perfect (judging my society's stereotypical views, of course). I'm a round faced person and I look like I'm on marijuana when I smile. So shoot me. Or not. "I’d probably have to paint it blue / because monotony makes me dizzy"-These are some EXCELLENT lines. I love this: "monotony makes me dizzy." Absolutely fantastic. Nothing else to say here. Except that a blue picket fence would look odd in my childhood neighborhood. But I suppose that's the point, eh? "Nyquil, / like loneliness / makes you babble and sleep a lot"-This made me laught. It's a good example of that humor your use to ease the mood. Great. Again, in closing, I'd like to say that I like this poem. It made me understand those who don't have the same views as I have better. You're very colloquial with your words, which makse it easier to understand to a loser like me. It's all the chemicals, indeed. Nice job. (And, of course, thanks for reviewing my work.)
Songbreeze the Omnipresent 2006-01-13 ch 1,	abuseWow. That's just great! ^_^ I love the randomness, and the message is so good. I really like the way it reads - the seperation onto all those lines makes it flow like a real stream-of-thought thing. ^_^ I think in circles like that, so I can see how you got to all those points. ^_^ Very nice, overall. applauds (And thank you for another review! I thought I'd return the favour. :D)
an-angel-in-hell 2006-01-11 ch 1,	abuse...Brilliant! I love how you just ramble (NyQuil, spell check, monks...) but still manage to get your point across so clearly- this rules. Totally brilliant.
xx-cronopio-xx 2006-01-11 ch 1,	abuseI LOVE THE SENSATION OF CONVERSATION HERE, HOW WE CAN GO OFF ON TANGENTS AND STILL SOMEHOW MANAGE TO REMAIN ON TOPIC -- YOUR CASE WAS ARGUED WELL. FAVES ADIEU, KAT ps. I THOUGHT THE ENDING LINE WAS A BIT ANTICLIMACTIC TO SUCH A SPIRITED, INTRIGUING POEM ... BUT PERHAPS YOU INTENDED IT TO APPEAR LIKE THE CONCLUSION TO A RAMBLING THOUGHT, WHICH WOULD BE BRILLIANCE ON YOUR PART. HMM. OH, WELL, JUST A THOUGHT. ADIEU, KAT

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