FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| bleeding subterfuge 2006-02-10 ch 1,  | abusesuperb, i love this piece, maybe because i am infatuated with the word 'anguish'... who knows |
| Kevin 2006-02-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseRelief as the pain fadesthe blades of grass swayand stay upright in shadesof gray. There is no color here,been killed by the fearof another pointless yearas the anguish will searevery last dying tear. |
| AethraZip 2006-01-12 ch 1, | abuseIt's fine, though I can see (knowing you) why you don't like it. The only thing *I* disliked about it was the fourth line... "never leaves, only adheres" It fits with the rhyming pattern and the theme of the poem, but the line has a different rhythm to it and just felt kind of off... I dunno, what am I talking about? Schwaa. |
| BlackDreamLily 2006-01-11 ch 1, | abuseHELLZYEAH! Loving this poem~ good idea using repetition like that. I like the way you rhym the last word... it's like a swiftly beating drum. Very profound. |
| Faithless Juliet 2006-01-11 ch 1, | abuseI loved how that rhyme evolved from beginning to end. Well thought out piece, keep up the good work. Much love,Juliet. |