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| Caoimhe's Sins 2006-01-22 ch 1,  | abuseI really, really like the way you formed your words. There are no stanzas, and that just attracts me. This unknown enemy gives your poem an air of mystery (or two). It's great how you make the fighting for your rights battle sound as an anicent battle with coats of link chain mail and gleaming,razor swords. I also like the last lines. " Who won I do not know". Cause really, there is no winner in a war. Everone is damaged, whether it be emotionally or physically.I know you are'nt literally talking about this huge sword that you got at a pawn shop, hefted in your car , and pointed it at a steroid pumped goliath that is physically keeping you seperated from a notebook and pen. Want to know how I know? I'm a phycic who can't spell phsycic. How do you spell that?Anyway, obviously there's more than one way to keep you from creating.Chase, Logan, and I (3 musketeers) havve all had this dreadful case of writer's block. Family and freind's problems effect you yo, in a domino effect thing. Anyway, nice job and keep writing.~des |
| Ryukoji 2006-01-17 ch 1, | abuseNo I. Great Poems! I love them all! Maybe this time i will actually keep up! I`ll try! I still ahve to read every one you write. like i promised, ^.^ keep up the amazing writing! -D |
| Lone Lily in the Garden 2006-01-13 ch 1, | abuseGreat Poem!! |
| Kimmi Gray 2006-01-12 ch 1, | abuseHaha someone took a page out of my book it seems lol I love this... good job. |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-01-11 ch 1, | abuseVery whimsical and flowing. Good write. |
| Patricia Louise 2006-01-11 ch 1, | abuseCool poem. What inspired it? |