Pretty good, pretty good.

This story reminds me so much of the one I'm working on, called HorseFlesh.

I think that the Nightmare is an evil horse. Except that you said that it's a 'he', and if it's a NightMARE, it would need to be a she.

But the Nightmare in your story also sounds more wolf-like. At least that's what I'm picturing as I read.

Whatever it is, I wouldn't want to meet up with it!

Interesting. I kinda see it this way: The young innocent girlc ould have been a young christian, and that terrible thing could have been a plan of the devil, a thing set out againgst our generation (such as impurity, immorality, suicide etc...basically all that's raging to try and destroy us) that wants to take our innocence? Or mayb I'm going way too into it haha either way, it's a good piece of writing. Personally I want to believe that she died for what she believed in, instead of giving in and losing her innocence...okay, I'll stop writing now! haha wo

xRachxPs. I wrote a personal message for ya on fiction.net :)