Good use of the iambic pentamiter (think that's what it's called anyway, the 10 beats in one line) anyway, really good intelligent use of the form and i can understand how it took you so long, form can be a ** but you managed to pull it off very well. Reminds me a bit of 'The Crow' don't know why, maybe it's your account name but very much had the style of the film in terms of rythem.

Peace out, keep writing, Kenzie

wow, this is good, i've been reading a lot of sonnets on here of late, just cause it's something i've not been brave enough to try, maybe to inspire me.. this is REALLY good, seriously, though provoking, and very well done... he last line haunting, great work thank you for sharing, and thanx forthe review!!

Hm...not at all my usual fare. But good use of sonnet form. Kudos for that and the ending. Excelent end on this. thanks for the review. Keep it up.

Absolutely gorgeous.

wow, i wish i could write a sonnet.this is really good.thanks for the review.~jestacy.

The last line is great. Very nice imagery.

This is very well done, and darkly descriptive. Phrases such as,"Like agony bleeding", really make this an intriguing read. I like the way the last line is set off to the side, kind of askewing the whole structured format. Sonnets are difficult to write and very limiting, but you've done an excellent job here. Good work.

love the last line. yah, the title does not do the poem justice. great job.

Nice shakeperan sonnet, couplet and all. "Crimson cloth to blacken they fearful faces"--> Thy? not they i believe. "God’s children crying, death, so far from home"-->Beautiful. Last lines are exquisite.