It does seem like a poem about death..."light at the end of the tunnel" stuff. A bit chilling and a bit confusing (only a little!) and very unique.

It's neat... the images are clear... (here comes the dreaded 'but') But I'm confused as to what you intended by this - what is the message? There seems to be a change when the 'light' comes, but what has changed, really?

Don't get me wrong, it's not bad by any stretch... I'm just missing the point. :/

abby

Hmm... I like the abstractness (if that's a word:-P) Your style is so deep and captivating... You are very talented with poetry.

"Sinking to what is supposed to be the ground,/ I am falling..." Those were my favorite lines. Reminds me of a dream I used to have...

Excellentissimus!

God bless -- J.max

This poem was good, morbid, but good. It seems to almost symbolize death, but it could also symbolize a lot of things. Good work. It flows very nicely.

No not really.. weird that is... great work I like this poem, I dunno it is just...I dunno. Thankyou for the reveiw... means lots!

Weird but cool. Well done.

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