I really liked your story a lot.

How much of a psychological thriller it was, i don't really know. I lvoed the wit of the part with the cheese slicer. That lightened the mood, but alos may have taken away from the psychological edge.

Now, I don't want to sound critical. Cause yeah, we have argued over my work a little, and I apologize for being stupid.

But one thing to be careful of is dialogue between characters, specfically when one character says don't hinder me. Now, it is correct grammar, but it doesn't read very easily. And also, before that, the other people are quite conversational and casual with tone and word choice, so that seemed a bit off.

But otherwise i commend you on very good, and brief, short story.

He sure did like this coffee. I'm glad you were able to do something with the idea I gave you. Very good job and well written ^^ I liked a lot

Intense. I love it! ^^

Farah,http://farahweb.cjb.ney

weird.

Ooh, that was good. I was wondering what significance the coffee had to the rest of the story. Very well-written. The title mainly drew me in, as it was very intriguing. You should write more thrillers!

~Isa Koliki~