beautiful... you rarely see poetry about the dogs from the Sputniks (sp?), and i love how well you described it. it made it seem like it could be a love poem, as well. great job :)

very pretty

are you sure youre fifteen?!?! cause that might just be a little too intense for me to handle

Ah, the loveliness. Magnificent mood created, the stars are so well-portrayed in this. Really good.

Oh, that was divine.

I love the title.

Words that, due to their presence alone, single-wordedly altered my perception of the entire thing: 'hurled', 'fade' and ... yeah.

You are amongst the few I've wandered into here who seem to have, in this instance at least, mastered the art of fragmenting sentences.

Gorgeous. I love how this could be interpreted in so many ways.

i loved the last stanza. i can imagine the beginning with a clairity.it reminds me of alice going down the rabbit hole.

a lovely topic, sweet and gently sad. I love that line 'did you gasp for air?'. Gorgeous.

i love this poem, especially the ending, it fits in really well.keep up the good work! :)