I like the way you worded it. It has good description.

I like it.

Hey! That is really my log-in name but I'm just lazy and dont' feel like logging in.

I liked it. It flowed pretty well but at parts it was a tad choppy, mostly at the end, because the last part doesn't seem to fit in with the rhyming scheme you had at the beginning. And near the beginning there are some misspelled words. But other than that it's great!

I realy like this! and I love your pen name!