I like it.. it's powerfully written and well done... the one line i don't like is

and the trains don’t wail... a train wailing would seem to fit the melancholoy mood maybe whistle or chime would better... i don't know

other than that awesome job.. i can totally relate

I wont butcher this as coming from the author of the worlds worst poetry that would be silly.

I will say that I know how you feel though, loneliness can be a real pain in the butt and drive us to all kinds of idiocy.

Even posting stuff that we think isn't as good as it could be!

Spawny