It was beautiful

Psh, awesome! It's done... how sad. Beautiful, magnificent end, and I like that it ended bittersweetly. It was meant to be... sigh. Great! I'm looking forward to more from you! :D

ah, the emptiness of life sometimes

Ah... nice. The description and imagery is wonderful. I feel like I'm right there. Yep. Awesome! Write more. :D

Dang. How old is this guy? But awesome! YESH. Characterization! It seems like a ...dysfunctional-ish-bordering type of family. Whatever.

This chapter has a wonderful, starkly created scene. It gives just enough detail without giving away too much. It also describes a great deal of characterization. Your image use is so qiuetly strong. Not overburdening the reader with excess detail, but just enough. Well done.

interesting view

really makes me stop and think

ahmazing.

really, i could say it over and over.

and the title, its like a lost puzzle piece somewhere

ahhnever angsty, i love this

its like a beloved old story i had been reading forever.

and shorter is better

in all actuality, yes

i can write and write. but when you have that one time where it comes out just right

yes.

ah, something about thisthe blank mystery

it is really nice

reminds me of today

for some reason, just now actually

anyhow, it was much more polite

i am going to go read the other seven chaptersyay

I was born in September. In the middle-ish. Hm... Wow, this is dramatic and sad.

"Under swirling skies, I closed my eyes, because seeing nothing was better than seeing her in this cold refuse."

Refuse? Like poop?!? O_O;;x

That's so sad. Poor little girl. I can't remember how old she is either.

i havent been followingbut i like this

its interesting

oh... suspense.