Two little minor things:

"as the moon’s blue rays come in to play with the fog." That would *came, instead of come. "Come" would be in the present tense, and you're writing in past tense.

"were they started into the thick forest"*where, not were

Um, Vic... WHOAH! This is sososo beautiful! I've never read anything like this, from you--this is amazing, my jaw dropped. It's so ethereal, like it's all covered with a film of ..well, moonbeams or something ;) Or silver spiderweb tendrils. hehehe

It's really lovely. I can't wait until you add the first chapter!

That was really poetic for a story prologue. I look forward to seeing the actual story.

Good prologue. Are you going to post the rest of the story here also? I hope you do! ^^ ~Aredhel