Wow, that's really good! So emotional! Write on!

~Anna~

The last line gives such a tragic and sad feeling to this poem.. Great work!

The first two lines were fine, but the final line could have been smoother.

Peace, Daze

you will always be wanted, and i will always love you... don't worry... i'll be home soon, but until then, you're in my heart:)

*hugs*

love,sirius

What a tender, evocative, poignant portrait of longing--beautiful!