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Loo'
2008-05-18
ch 1, anon.
abuse“I’d give up eternity for you”

I cried. I just **' cried. I never cry!

Yeah, a life of happiness is much better than an eternity made of liars.

That was just beautiful.
TheNarglesWillEatYou
2008-03-16
ch 1,
abusei liked it! i don't think it's too corny! and i get the message, not paying that much attention to who's saying what. well written.
acduetry
2007-06-25
ch 1,
abuseThis was just perfect. I think you made your point beautifully and wrote one of those stories that stays with the reader and pops up at random moments throughout their day making them sigh and smile at nothing. I completely adore this!
Queen Felicity IV
2007-05-26
ch 1,
abuseThis is a beautiful story. I love your choice of words and the way they flow. I just want to read it over and over.
the sacred night
2006-07-15
ch 1,
abuseThis is almost like poetry, since it's more of a montage of images and emotions than a story. Not that that's a bad thing. It's cool how it's confusing but at the same time, in the end it makes perfect sense.
tia-blue
2006-06-06
ch 1,
abusedon't worry it wasn't to corny. I loved it! and the last line is just so perfect!
Lexy-Kun
2006-06-04
ch 1,
abuseIt's so... so... amazing, wonderful, great... Oh my it's 3 in the morning, I'm a just a poor little french and I'm at a loss of word to describe it - but then I guess even if english was my mother language and it was 3 in the afternoon i wouldn't find the right words either.It feels so right, it makes me so happy that I... I just love it so much ! Why can't everyone see that ? Life would be so much easier if people could just stop being such heartless narrow-minded bastard and begin to realise that when two people truly love each other it's never wrong. They're all saying that love is the most beautiful thing in the world and then when you love someone of the same gender suddenly your love is dirty... I just can't understand this.Well... anyway, i'm just babling rather incoherently... I apologize !Just... thank you so much for this little story. It's really, really beautiful... (and it's not too corny for me. It's perfect !)
Kitsune Luver
2006-04-17
ch 1, anon.
abuseCorny is good. I like corny. This was so sweet.
Bleeding Paper Stars
2006-02-18
ch 1,
abuseThe point. I didn't really worry about who said what. But I didn't get the point... Maybe it's 'cause I'm still a kid, maybe because I only got three hours of sleep last night and have been awake since 5, who knows. The point is(my point here, not the one of the story. Okay, I'll shut up now)I don't get the point. Hm... In a way that sounds kinda... well, like it doesn't make sense. Like an oxymoron, only not. As I said I'll shut up now.
Walking In Beauty
2006-02-05
ch 1,
abuseits not corny. actually this is my favorite so far
Joanne
2006-01-22
ch 1, anon.
abusewell, i didn't think it was corny. actually, it really touched me. good job =)
Jonnixfluff
2006-01-21
ch 1,
abuseholy **! i love this! it seriously hit a chord in my heart! keep it up!
Finger Dingbat
2006-01-20
ch 1,
abusesweet, and beautifully written, love the "silver cross" thing, and the "eden is burning" *giver you a corney smile and 2 thumbs up* lol, keep it up
Rainbow Fingers
2006-01-16
ch 1,
abuse"Out side the window, Eden is burning."

That was my favorite line, but then again, there were a lot of spectacular lines in this. It was sad and poetic and made you think. I also loved how the second to last line was arranged. Nicely done. I had to read it twice though. But it made it that much better, you know?
Venustas iaceo
2006-01-16
ch 1,
abuseIt's so poetic. I don't think it's corny at all, I find it deliciously poetic.
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