Brilliant! Good descriptive words. It flows nicely and makes sense. 10/10

Haunting. The words are remarkably full for a poem that leaves me so empty.

i love this. it's so soft and graceful; love the repetitions, love "nothing, nothing, but a purple butterfly and a rusty anchor"- it's so softly hopeless, so quiet and gorgeous. but "empty bottle" seems a bit forced-in, to speak, without much of a lead-in, jarring and short- sort of breaks the mood...

Very well written. Your word choice was particularly effective. Good job!

I like it.

if you really did come up with this while writing all night, that's genious i think. i can never come up with things at night, i vomit on the page and call it poetry. it's gorgeous the way this was written, i love it. the feeling to it makes me stare. it's lovely.

I love this. There is a certain sense of hopelessnes...that is rustic, and ancient, but just newly discovered. So much for human effort, huh?

like the repeating, its pleasant

rivers again in this. and dunes, love your use of landscapes, but a lot of the poems seem hopeless lately.