I love ur Poem!

this is very beautiful. i liked the dangling thread, very expressive and provides nice imagery. if you get a chance..review some of my poetry?

Hey again,

How do you manage and put such complex ideas and qualities so simply? Instead of getting tangled in metaphors and over-worded phrases, you just state clearly and calmly what you mean to say exactly.

Another great poem. My favourite part of the poem is the dependance on the reader and use of the 2nd person.

Ethereal Kisses

Wonderful.

Shattered and Cold...Great effect.

I adore it, as I adore you.

Kingu.

absolutely brilliant! ok, i guess its short and there arent that many words but the beat is fantastic and you ended it beautifully...so great job! btw, i hav a friend who is absolutely obsessed with canada. what's it like over there? (sorry, but i read ur profile and i got curious. lol.) she wants to come there after we finish school and stuff.

anyway, back to the poem. it's totally brill! i look forward to reading more of ur stuff,

mez

0_0 I feel like this sometimes. Nicely written. Personally I'd added a few more dots at the end to make it look more 'dangerous' maybe or 'desperate' But it works like this as well very ominous :D